Camp Writing - E-Portfolio

By Anonymous -
Motivation:
Camp Experiences
Learning Objectives:
Level 3
  • Show a developing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.
  • Select, form, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
  • Use language features appropriately, showing a developing understanding of their effects.
  • Organise texts, using a range of appropriate structures.
Level 4
  • Show an increasing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.
  • Select, develop, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
  • Use a range of language features appropriately, showing an increasing understanding of their effects.
  • Organise texts. Using a range of appropriate structures.
Learning goals:
  • To hook the reader in with an interesting beginning
  • A variety of sentence starters
  • A variety of sentence lengths
  • Edit and rework
  • Effective peer checking and feedback



                                                                          Camp
      As I escalated up the ladder all harnessed up and super pumped. As I just went past the the first spiral of the tree we were saying to my group how are we going to make it to the top. As we got to about half way up the tree our group was starting to get worried and people in our group wanted to start heading down. In the corner of my eye I saw the chain which was the top of the tree, every person changed their mind in seconds. There we were at the top of the tree.

Everyone being so exited for making it to the top people giving high fives to everyone in the group. So now we are up to the easy part going down. But I wouldn't say it was to easy for Logan having two challenges, trying to go around two groups and finding long spaces for Nikau.





Teacher Comment:
Milan, you have begun your story in an interesting way to hook the reader in.Your writing shows you are able to include a variety of sentence structures and you have added details to support your main ideas. Your next step is to continue to add detail to your writing to make it even more interesting.
 


















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